The original - The old school narrative

Ya'lls Remixes

Big D's Remix- I liked D's remix's becuase first she cleaned up the grammer and spelling in her first remix which was much needed. Then in her second remix she started from the end of the story and explained how it was all laid out. I enjoyed all her imput and liked the reverse play of the story she put together.

Farrah Remix- Farrah's remix was not a large change but it played a huge role in the story. I saw that farrah cleaned up the grammer also, but her main role was the spacing and lay out of the story. Farrah's changes made the story a little easier on the eyes and alot easier to read. She turned a large one body narrative into a multi-paragraphed story.

Regina Remix- Regina's remix was a funny one and added a little BAM to the story. I borrowed Regina's beginning of the story because her twist and personal feel was a great begining and I iiked the way she tied the end and begining together. Altogether regina's twists and changes to my story improved it greatly.

Afram Remix- Afram's remix was a small one also, but he put his own twists on my story. He first shortened the story by a significant amount, which made it short and to the point. i emjoyed my original story, but also I enjoyed Afram's remix and his own personal twists he put on it.

Thanks for the help here guys, I like the twists, and improvements

My remixes

I Remix Afram - The new Athanasious

I Remix Robert - Crazy adventure

I Remix Regina - What killer manatees?

I hope I was of some sort of assistance to any of ya'll. I tried to change up each story to add somehting different.

The master piece - The new and improved