General consensus seems to be that my cover page sucks. So here's a better one.

My Original Narrative:

Danielle's Narrative

My Edits and Remixes of Others:

D edits A

D remixes A

D edits S

D remixes S

D edits N

D Remixes N

My Final:

Danielle's Final

Regina did some touching up on my narrative with sentences and grammar. My favorite part of all was definitely the beautiful touch at the end, with the "Merry Christmas Dad". It was definitely just what I was looking for. Thanks, that was awesome!

Emery edited my writing today. I worked on that first paragraph for at least a half hour after I wrote it, because I knew it didn't flow. Clearly, I got nowhere. Your/his revision of it was perfect. I love the written out numbers, I had forgotten how important that is in presentation. I disagree a bit on the analysis, because, I think my story's awesome.. and clearly, you/he don't/doesn't! ;) Haha.. just kidding! However, as much as I love to write, I'm a reader, myself. Therefore, I write the way I like to read. The details are very important to me, because I want to see and know the characters. So to some it seems bothersome and not interesting, but to me, it's the most important part. I wanted everyone to know the Brett that I know. As for the "sexual persuasion", I'm not sure that I understand what exactly that means. The ending wasn't supposed to be a surprise, it was a chapter of a person's life. It wasn't a "GOTCHA!" story.. just the way it happened in my head. Ya know? ;) Thanks so much though, for the input!