Ted's cover page is very well done, and I give him the full points for that. The original story is great, and had surprise value for me, as this was the first time I read it. Ted's narrative was certainly unique; much different idea than other narrative projects because

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Ted certainly edited and re-edited his work before he posted it to the wiki, and I expect others will soon adopt this practice of fishing out syntax/grammar mistakes before uploading. I like that he went over it before the class did. I give him the full points on that as well. Also, I considered Ted's remixes when computing and awarding points for his efforts. Although he made dramatic changes on certain narratives, his revisions, for the most part did not take away from the purpose and tone of the original stories. Of course, some of his remixes were quite dramatic and even drastic, but in these cases, it seemed to me that Ted's remixes provided helpful depatterning and feedback for others, and that is what matters. Ted also looked like he took peoples' thoughts into concern. When you look at his final you can see pieces of other peoples work. These adaptations of Scott's descriptions, John M's creative use of "space," and John S's structuring devices were won by his careful reading and translated into his startling final narrative. I believe that his final had many changes and it looks like he took time the really do his best.

Cover page - 3/3

Teds Remixes - 5/5

Original - 2/2

Using others remixes 5/5

Final - 5/5

Farrah

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