Ninja, although your creative and original approach would normally not interest me I did enjoy reading your narrative. You received all your point in the categories of originality and your overall portfolio package. You did not receive full credit in your narrative transformation because of numerous spelling mistakes (over 10) I am not including any of the word choice that gives the characters their particular voice, but am referring to words like; emergency, reassuring, and committed. Due to the spelling mistakes you lost two points in this category. You also were deducted two points from the remixes of others because of your Haiku for Afram, although funny, it was not fulfilling the purpose of the remix. Ninja you were very original and creative in writing this narrative and I enjoyed reading it.

Grade by the Numbers:

1- Narrative transformation: 5/7

2- Participation in Remixes of others: 5/7

3- Originality of Work: 3/3

4- Final Portfolio Package: 3/3

Total- 16/20

1-Narrative transformation: Did the write take his diamond in the rough to a sparkling gem or was it left to gather dust. This includes grammar, flow of narrative, and improvements made to help the flow of the narrative.

2- Participation in Remixes of others: Did the writer fulfill the requirements of remixing three other students work.

3- Originality of Work: Was the writer’s work original that had flavor and kept the reader engaged.

4-Final Portfolio Package: this can be the cover sheet, but a place where all work during narrative assignment can be viewed.