Here I began:

1. conception

Here's what y'all thought:

2. Ted's Remix on Scott's Narrative

I decided to make the piece more fluid. It had been very broken before. Ted inspired me to smooth out some jerkiness

Ninja's Remix on Scott's Narrative

This was just plain cool. I couldn't bring myself to incorporate any of his additions directly because I wanted to be true to what really happend. It still reminded me to make it entertaining. Great elements of story

Danielle's Remix on Scott's Narrative

Danielle helped me with my finishing touches. Gots my grammar checked.

Here's what I thought of y'all:

3. my reviews

Here's what I finished with:

4. my final story