Danielle's Portfolio

Again, since I'm not sure if I'm doing this correctly I'm doing it a little different, hoping that I will get one right. Let us also hope that I'm not as critical as Danielle thinks I am.

To grade yours I'm thinking of starting you at a 0 and adding points as I analyze your process. First, I really liked your story (+8), it had a nice twist ending that I probably should have seen coming but didn't. Twists are hard to pull off, so you get (+4) for that. You had a nice clean rough draft, it showed you took the time to proofread and edit a little on your own (+3). However your final copy was hardly any different from your original (-4). But you only had one remix written on your story, so you can't really be blamed for that (+4).

Your remixes were very creative (+6) and thought provoking, however I dwelled on the phrase mental heart attack a tad too long (-1) and how could bomberman and his friends be out on bail after murdering 200 people? come on! (-1).

I grade pretty tough on punctuality, so I have to say (-5) for putting your narrative up late, but you were really prompt with the portfolio cover page so I'll give you (+3). I feel responsible for part of your misunderstanding the remix process since I was the one you asked for clarification. For that I feel compelled to give you (+2). Lets see what you ended up with. Looks like a 19 out of 20, not to shabby!

John S

After further review and a new posting of a new and improved final version, you get an extra point - 20/20.