Farrah's Portfolio

*Cover: Her cover is a fluent explanation of her experience and all the observations she made through the process. She gave honest anecdotes about why she used suggestions and how she remixed others' work. 2/2

*Original: I liked her story. Though it was rusty, her emotional story was moving to me. I thought it was brave of her to expose this particular part of her life. 3/4

*Remix: Farrah and I transversely remixed eachother's work. She made very useful suggestions to grammatics, and language use in the stories she read. 8/8

*Final: She used all the suggestions and wove them into a final product. I like the way she changed the anecdotes and applied grammatical changes. Her final product is very moving.

6/6

Grade: 19

Regina,

What "hacks" or techniques do we have for "rust removal" and subsequent "refinishing" or our writing and it's surface sheen? Consider carefully just one instance where Farah's readers might become distracted by here syntax. Using this example, offer one of our tools for editing with "rust" in mind. I like this metaphor, and I think it will be a helpful addition to our lexicon of words and images we are building (our "rhetoric") for writing together.

-ShareRiff