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s o that is how John defines

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on March 26, 2007 at 2:01:36 am



This is a fantastic piece. The linkage is relevant and interesting. The light tone contrasts the fairly heavy subject. The structure utilizes just enough breaks to make the gravity of the content digestible.


I would have liked a bit more transition from the fidelity definition in the first sentence to the idea of rapid information growth - perhaps a sentence here and there to restate the logical sequence. I found myself having to tie my own threads to connect some of the digression.


throw in a little grammar check:


Though humanity has begun to empirically understand reality and question authority, fidelity's role -in- as an agent of control has only become more diverse


Out of 20 I say 20.

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